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The Narrator’s Point of View in Your Songwriting

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Introduction

Do you ask yourself, “What in the world is point of view anyway?” Does your audience sometimes get confused about who is singing in your songs? You may have problems with your point of view. Read more to learn about the narrator’s point of view in your songwriting.

The narrator tells the story in your song. We have three generally accepted points of view that you can use in your lyrics. Each one has its strengths and weaknesses.

We’ll define each point of view. Then, we’ll look at the different points of view by considering how much the singer and the audience fuse with the characters in each perspective. In other words, does the singer and the audience feel like characters in the song or not?

We’ll start with second person perspective, which creates a lot of character fusion. Then, we’ll finish with the third person perspective, which has no character fusion. Each point of view will have lyrics from a songwriting standard which will demonstrate the concepts.

This article uses literary terms. For definitions, see the Glossary at the end of the post.

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The Personal Perspective and the Narrator’s Point of View in Your Songwriting

Second Person Perspective

The narrator’s point of view when using second person perspective goes from the singer to the audience where both play a role in the story.

In other words, the singer plays a character that sings directly to another character that the audience has fused with. This means the audience members feel like the second character in the story. Thus, this point of view creates an intimacy between the singer and the audience.

However, it can sometimes be difficult to add in imagery. Because you have to make sure that you don’t describe situations that the “singee” would already know. If you do that, it can make the dialog between the characters sound unnatural.

You can get around this by having the singer talk about feelings (“when you did [this], I felt [that]”) or remember events (“remember when we…”).

The Darktown Strutters Ball includes a good amount of imagery, but not by recalling the past. Instead, the singer anticipates the future. He eagerly tells the singee about their invite to a trendy ball, and all that they can do when they get there.

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The Darktown Strutter’s Ball Lyrics

Note how the narrator’s point of view has him directly interacting with the audience. See the video below to hear how the lyrics sound with the music.

Mobile users: for best results reading the lyrics, tilt your screen 90o to the right.

I’ve got some good news, honey

An invitation to the Darktown Ball

It’s a very swell affair

All the “high-browns” will be there

I’ll wear my high silk hat and frock tail coat

You wear your Paris gown and your new silk shawl

There ain’t no doubt about it babe

We’ll be the best dressed in the hall

Chorus:

I’ll be down to get you in a taxi, honey

You better be ready about half past eight

Now dearie, don’t be late

I want to be there when the band starts playing

Remember when we get there, honey

The two-steps I’m goin’ to have ’em all

Goin’ to dance out both my shoes

When they play the “Jelly Roll Blues”

Tomorrow night, at the Darktown Strutter’s Ball

We’ll meet our high-toned neighbors

An exhibition of the “Baby Dolls”

And each one will do their best

Just to outclass the rest

And there’ll be dancers from every foreign land

The classic, buck and wing, and the wooden clog

We’ll win that fifty dollar prize

When we step out and “Walk the Dog”

(Chorus)

The Darktown Strutter’s Ball Video

The Narrator’s Point of View in Your Songwriting: The Singer Remains Part of the Action

First Person Perspective

The narrator’s point of view when using first person perspective has the singer “on-stage” as part of the story. However, unlike second person perspective, the audience doesn’t fuse with a character. Namely, the audience has no role in the action.

That means that this point of view doesn’t have the intimate quality of the second person perspective. On the other hand, writing imagery for first- and third-person perspectives will be much easier to do than with second-person perspective.

This version of Clementine has the lyrics in first person perspective. Also, it has a more serious story than you often find in more modern versions. Conversely, the video version of Clementine (below) lampoons the maudlin quality of the late 19th century songs. In addition, it uses second person perspective.

Clementine Lyrics

Watch how the narrator’s point of view has him talking about a character that does not include the audience. Yet, he himself still has a role in the story.

 

In the center of a valley

Dwelled a girl who looked divine

A pretty creature, a miner’s daughter

And he named her Clementine

 

Chorus:

Oh my darling, oh my darling

Yes, my darling, Clementine

She is lost to me forever

How I miss my Clementine

 

She led her ducks down to the river

And the weather looked just fine

Stubbed her foot against a sliver

Fell into the raging brine

 

(Chorus)

 

Heard her calling, calling louder

With her voice clear as a chime

But alas I was no swimmer

And I lost my Clementine

 

(Chorus)

Clementine Video

The Narrator’s Point of View in Your Songwriting: Keeping Your Distance

Third Person Perspective

The narrator’s point of view for third person perspective insulates both the singer and the audience from the characters in the song. The singer acts as an “offstage” narrator that describes the story. However, neither the singer nor the audience will be one of the characters.

The third person perspective allows the singer and the audience to have a little distance from the characters in the lyrics. With both first- and second-person perspectives, the singer fuses with the main character.

However, if the characters do things that make them unpleasant, third person perspective will be a better choice. Because this perspective allows some detachment from the subject. If you use first- or second-person perspectives for a nasty character, many singers will avoid recording the song. Yet, they might sing the song if it gets cast in third person perspective.

In the song The Cat Came Back, the characters try over and over again to abandon or kill the cat. However, the cat just keeps coming back. Using the third person perspective allows us to keep ourselves at arm’s length from a character the SPCA would frown upon.

The following video shows a more kid friendly version of the song. However, the third person perspective remains intact. (The musical arrangement sounds pretty cool, too. Enjoy.)

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The Cat Came Back Lyrics

You will notice that the singer and audience can’t be found in these lyrics. The narrator’s point of view remains totally aloof. Thus, why we call it third person perspective, because it details the events around a third person – not the narrator or the audience.

 

Well, old Mister Johnson, he had troubles of his own

He had an old yellow cat who wouldn’t leave its home

He tried ev’rything he knew to keep that cat away

Even sent it to a teacher and he told that cat to stay

 

Chorus:

But the cat came back, couldn’t stay no longer

The cat came back, the very next day

The cat came back, thought he was a goner

But the cat came back, for it wouldn’t stay away

 

A man down on the corner swore to kill the cat on sight

Loaded up his rifle with nails and dynamite

He waited in the garden for the cat to come around

Though they looked and looked that man they never found

 

(Chorus)

 

Once he gave the cat away to a man in a balloon

And told that man to take it to the man up in the moon

But the balloon got busted, so everybody said

It sailed seven miles away where it crushed a flower bed

 

(Chorus)

 

The cat it was a terror and they said it would be best

To give it to an old man who traveled out West

The train went ‘round the curve and struck a broken rail

Not a blessed soul aboard the train was left to tell the tale

 

(Chorus)

The Cat Came Back Video

Concluding Thoughts to The Narrator’s Point of View in Your Songwriting

By now, you’ll have a good grasp of how the narrator’s point of view can affect the tone and mood of your song. Which point of view you use will really depend on the type of song you want to write.

Your next step should be to listen to a few of your favorite songs and observe how each song’s point of view affects the lyrics. Next, do the same thing for some of the hit songs on the radio. Then, write a song in each narrative perspective. Have fun writing!

© 2022 Geoffrey Keith

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